[Suikoden] Caretaker.
Jul. 9th, 2005 06:24 amIf I submitted this to a critique circle, the first comment would be, "You should show us, not tell us - turn these paragraphs into scenes." Since I don't intend to turn this into a story, you get to be told, not shown. If this little exercise doesn't work, maybe I'll take that piece of advice and try again.
All I want is for Asen to exist for me as more than a name. It can only help me later in the SPPM timeline.
( It was hard to believe he had opposed their creation. )
All I want is for Asen to exist for me as more than a name. It can only help me later in the SPPM timeline.
( It was hard to believe he had opposed their creation. )